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You and your family are living in rented accommodation in an English speaking country. You are not satisfied with the condition of some of the furniture. Write a letter to your landlord. In your letter introduce yourself explain what is wrong with the furniture say what action you would like the landlord to take

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Dear Mr. Najafi I am Mr.
zare
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Zare
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 who lives in your rental apartment. In
fact
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 my family and I have lived there for 5 years. Our apartment number is 12
in
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on
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first
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the first
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 floor of Oak apartment on Alavi
street
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Street
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which
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whose
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 postcode is NY457 Actually, I am writing
this
 letter
becouse
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because
 we have a majority of problems with some furniture,
such
 as
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the refrigarator
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refrigarator
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refrigerator
refrigerators
, stove and air
condition
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conditioning
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 system. At
first,
the stove has lost two fire
place
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places
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since
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for
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 3 months.
In addition
, the door of
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the refrigrator
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refrigrator
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refrigerator
refrigerators
do
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does
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 not close correctly and needs to keep
close
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closed
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 with pressure.
Finaly
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Finally
, and the main reason that I
am
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have
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 decided to
writing
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write
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for
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to
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 you about
air
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the air
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 conditioner, trully it works with a loud harmful sound and
also
got
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apply
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water the
buildings
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building's
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 roof and probably damade
celling
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ceiling
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. so our
neighbers
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neighbours
 reported to the police and the police accepted their
fauilt
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fault
 and just will have one week rest to second
awarness
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awareness
 to fix it.
In
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result
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a result
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, we would need enough money to solve its problem. If we do not
any
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apply
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act for the police sign, not only have to give payment, but
also
 maybe the council will order
to
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us to
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 close our home. Your
Sincerly
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Sincerely
, Mr. Zare
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The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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