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Band 4.5

Some students.take one year off between finishing high school and going to university, in order to travel or to work.

Today, some
graduates
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 prefer to take a
gap
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year
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 prior to furthering their education at
university
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.
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this
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 decision is not without its downsides. I believe it is largely a sensible choice.
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 some
students
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, during the
gap
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year
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,
students
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 have a lyrical withdrawal and it is difficult to concentrate
while
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 studying.
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, the reading slows down.
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result
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, their dream is not to inspect, but to travel or have fun.So, they will not be able to find a
job
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 in the future, because they did not
courses
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 at the
university
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, but the
vacation
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 provided by the investigation, and they could not do the lessons on time. Even now it becomes difficult for them to find a
job
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 in their field.
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,I believe that
Graduates
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 should
also
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 take a
vacation
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 because they go to subject day and night away from Today, some
graduates
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 prefer to take a
gap
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year
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 prior to furthering their education
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university
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.
While
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this
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 decision is not without
it
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 downsides. I believe it is largely a sensible choice.
According to
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 some
students
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, during the
gap
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year
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,
students
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 have a lyrical withdrawal and it is difficult to concentrate
while
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 studying.
Additionally
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, the reading slows down.
As a
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result
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, their dream is not to
inspection
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inspect
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, but to travel or have fun.So, they will not be able to find a
job
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 in the future, because they did not
course
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courses
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 at the
university
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, but the
vacation
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 provided by the investigation, and they could not do the lessons on time. Even now it becomes difficult for them to find a
job
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 in their field.
However
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,I believe that
Graduates
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 should
also
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 take a
vacation
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 because they go to subject day and night away from their
families
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,
that is
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, to go to other regions,
as a
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result
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, they live an independent
life
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 away from their
families
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. But they have a feeling of longing, they miss their family.
For
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this
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 reason, it is appropriate for them to go to their
families
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 on the main holidays. In conclusion, granted, taking a
gap
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year
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 has some minus points, but I am convinced that its upsides ranging from self - grows to a necessary escape from academic
life
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 are more substantial.
families
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,
that is
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, to go to other regions,
as a
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result
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, they live an independent
life
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 away from their
families
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. But they have a feeling of longing, they miss their family.
For
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this
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 reason, it is appropriate for them to go to their
families
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 on the main holidays. In conclusion, granted, taking a
gap
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year
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 has some minus points, but I am convinced that its upsides ranging from self - grows to a necessary escape from academic
life
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 are more substantial.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Gap year
  • Academic momentum
  • Practical experience
  • Financial pressures
  • Interim period
  • Soft skills
  • Maturity
  • Independence
  • Career exploration
  • Re-adjustment
  • Social setbacks
  • Informed decision-making
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