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Many museums and historical sites are mainly visited by tourists and not local people. Why is this the case? What can be done to attract local people?

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It is claimed that citizens do not
visit
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 local
museums
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 or historical
sites
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,
instead
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, mainly
people
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 from other countries will go to these
places
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.
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 essay will argue that
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 is because of the different interests and carrying out some activities that can attract local individuals. The main factor is the different motivations between tourists and local
people
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. Travellers' aim is to
visit
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 the countries and go to the most popular
places
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, feel and watch the culture of those
places
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, and learn something new and
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 why tourists will
visit
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museums
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 and historical
sites
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 since they can get a lot of information in these locations.
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 the local
people
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 normally have knowledge about what can be seen, they have learned about it at school and have had personal experiences, so they would think that they don’t need to go to those
places
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.
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, there are a lot of
museums
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 and historical
sites
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 in all European countries, where normally, only travellers will go to watch it, since they will only see it once in their life. A way to encourage natives to historical locations could be by adding activities.
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 can be exhibitions, cultural events or new products,
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 will help
people
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 to be interested in things that they have not seen before. Another way could be by reducing prices or free tickets provided in local newspapers and magazines.
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 is because since there are promotions,
people
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 are willing to go whenever they have time.
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, in Spain, Madrid there are several
museums
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 that are free for all
people
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 at a given time of the day, producing large queues of
people
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. In conclusion, tourists go more to historical
places
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 of another country because
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 their aim; to experience and
visit
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 new regions,
while
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 local individuals already have knowledge about them.
However
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,
museums
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 and historical
sites
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 could attract residents by adding original ideas and making promotions.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cultural heritage
  • tourist attractions
  • interactive exhibits
  • perception
  • civic pride
  • engagement
  • community outreach
  • curate
  • cultural institutions
  • historical significance
  • sustainable tourism
  • resident benefits
  • local patronage
  • preserve
  • educational initiatives
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