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Writing Samples
Band 5

In order to study at university students are required to pay expensive tuition fees. Not all students can afford them so some people think that university education should be free for everyone. To what extent do you agree?

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It is broadly believed that
academy
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 education ought to provide free of charge tuition for everyone.
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 I support
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 view, somehow, I assume that
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 could be a problem if each
university
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 applies
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 impractical view
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 the
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 should take the burden.
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, there should be criteria for those who could get
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 following essay. On the one hand, in line with inflation, the fees in order to be in a
university
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 are getting higher and more expensive and, unfortunately, not all students can afford it.
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, the
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 should provide a scholarship or tuition help for some disciples.
Indonesian
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Government
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,
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, provide massive scholarship only for the superb candidate for
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. They help
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 people in order to be able to learn abroad at
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.
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, many Indonesians could afford an undergraduate degree or higher.
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, if the policymakers provide massive scholarship, it would impact on economic
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 in Indonesia.
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, the
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 do a schematic instrument or criteria to obtain brilliant candidates. As an illustration, people who have experience in social is more preferable to
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 of the people who only get
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 GPA but do nothing
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 society. By way of conclusion, I am still convinced that
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 presence is the key to
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 some pupils in order to have a seat in
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.
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, they
also
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 have to select the candidates so the chosen ones fulfil the minimum requirements.

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Provide a more comprehensive explanation of how government scholarships can address the issue of expensive tuition fees
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