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In this essay, I will challenge the notion that these two behaviors are alike in their antisocial implications and argue that such a ban is not justified.

Some people believe that smoking is akin to using mobile
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 in terms of how antisocial they are, and
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, similar to smoking, there should be a
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 on the
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 of these electronic devices in some places. In
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 essay, I will challenge the notion that these two
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 are alike in their antisocial implications and argue that
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 a
ban
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 is not justified.
While
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 it is indisputable that smoking poses severe health risks and thereby should be restricted in public spaces to protect non-smokers from passive smoking, the same cannot be said for mobile phone
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. Unlike smoking, which directly impacts the well-being of those nearby, mobile
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 have a minimal effect on the health of surrounding individuals.
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, the introduction of a
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 on mobile
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 in the same manner as smoking is questionable.
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, it is important to carefully consider that the implementation of a
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 on phone
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 may necessitate a significant allocation of resources to ensure compliance, diverting valuable funds from other pressing priorities
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 as education. To add
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 on mobile
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 could potentially yield counterproductive outcomes by negatively affecting individuals' lives. Many rely on mobile
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 as essential tools for maintaining communication with clients or colleagues, integral to their professional responsibilities. Disrupting
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 communication channel may lead to a breakdown in their work processes.
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, individuals often
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 to connect with loved ones, to find entertainment during tedious journeys, particularly on public transport, and to serve a multitude of other purposes. Restricting
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 access could diminish citizens'
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 satisfaction and interfere with their personal matters. In conclusion, I firmly oppose the idea of banning mobile
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due to
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 the distinctive roles they play in our everyday lives.
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, the comparison between smoking and mobile phone
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,
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, lacks a fundamental similarity in their impact on the well-being of those nearby.

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