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In order to study at university students are required to pay expensive tuition fees. Not all students can afford them so some people think that university education should be free for everyone. To what extent do you agree?

#study #university #students #tuition #fees #people #education
Education
 is
fundamental
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 necessity for all individuals.
However
, the
issues
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issue
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 of university
tuition
fees
 often
prove
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 to be
major
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a major
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 obstacle to all students. In
this
 condition, so many people always talk about these problems.
Pro
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 and cons are always debatable
about
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education
fees
. The
education
fees
 give
a
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numerous valuable
resource
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resources
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such
 as high-speed internet connection,
high quality
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of
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laboratories and extensive
library
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libraries
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, without that. It will significantly affect
to
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the
student
due to
 good experiences and effective teaching methods.
Firstly
, the most common
problem
about
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education
 is always
tuition
fees
, so many students who
has
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high
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a high
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 score
of
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 GPAS can’t afford
university
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a university
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 level of
education
due to
 high
tuition
fees
 so they can’t get a better chance to make a good contribution to our social economy
problem
 and solved the common
problem
 of development county like Indonesia.
In addition
, the government elaborate with
private
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a private
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 company to empower
student
 who has
a
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good soft skill and enough
GPA
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GPAs
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 through scholarship programs. With these
facilities
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 the most common
problem
 between
student
 and universities are separately solved
due to
 the balance of
tuition
fees
 and
student
 need. By way of conclusion, I believe through good
education
, we can develop
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excellence
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 life and
better
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a better
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 world,
Furthermore
.
according to
 my explanation above. I strongly agree that university
education
 should be free for everyone.
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