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addiction to the internet is a widespread problems. what problems does this causes? what is a suitable solution

#addiction #internet
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A worrisome trend has emerged with
regards
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 to
people
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 who are addicted to the
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internet
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Internet
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.
This
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 issue leads to
the
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increased
obesity
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 and mental
health
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problems
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become
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worsening. A useful solution should be prioritised is addicts should
be
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cut back on the amount of
using
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social media and replace
by
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apply
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having some
hobbies
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such
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 as reading
books
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,
hanging
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and hanging
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 out with
friends
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. First and foremost, a consequence
should
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that should
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 be concerned about is the rate of
obesity
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 increasing.
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 is because
,
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people
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 spend time on using the
internet
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 too much and do not have any time and plans to eat healthily and balance
the
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their
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 lifestyle.
As a result
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,
obesity
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 adversely affects the life expectancy and habits of diet,
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, in the USA, the proportion of teenagers being overweight is approximately 40%.
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, that is an alarming number of mankind's physical
health
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. Another repercussion should be acknowledged that mental
health
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problems
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due to
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 obsession with the
internet
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 become more worsening.
This
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 is
due to
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 the fact that whilst using online with a
smart phone
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smartphone
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 or laptop,
people
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 just chat with
friends
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 or acquaintances via a screen without any talking or communication with other
people
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.
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, addicts tend to live in their own world,
hesitate
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and hesitate
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 to speak out loud and some mental
health
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problems
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such
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 as stress,
depression
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and depression
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 appear and have a detrimental effect on them.
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, a study has shown that 60% of
people
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 have some mental
health
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problems
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due to
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 overusing the
internet
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.
However
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, a step
can
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that can
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 be taken to mitigate
this
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 problem is the addict's attempt to replace that bad habit with other positive
hobbies
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such
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 as reading
books
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,
hanging
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and hanging
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 out with
friends
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. With
this
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 approach, addicts can be more healthy and may have a
balance
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 routine and lifestyle.
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 is because
,
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apply
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these
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apply
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hobbies
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 like reading
books
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listening
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and listening
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 to music are positive,
have
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and have
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 an optimistic way
to shape
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of shaping
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 their life.
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, many
people
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 try to get rid of the addiction and
then
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havea
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have a
have
 healthy life. In conclusion,
obesity
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 and mental
health
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problems
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 are both
the
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apply
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concerning consequences, yet
it
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they
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 can be tackled by replacing the bad
habit
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habits
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by
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apply
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doing other
hobbies
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such
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 as reading
books
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,
hanging
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and hanging
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 out with
friends
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.
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