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Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To waht extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Many people are of the opinion that
music
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 can
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 humans with various cultures and divergent
generation
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 together. I totally agree with
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 the reasons which will be discussed in the following paragraphs.
Now a days
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music
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 and art occupy an axial role in our lives indeed they are
integral
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part
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 of
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 life. It does not depend on the age and the culture. undoubtedly all of society’s members listen to
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everyday
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. Not only do all humans
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 different ages enjoy listening
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music
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 but
also
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 they have
a
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 same taste in
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songs.
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, my father and I have
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 same idea about new vocalists and both of us prefer old singers so in my solid opinion, your
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 song can be
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with
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 people who are so older than you.
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,
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 should touch your soul and it is not related to your
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 or your culture because it communicates with folks’
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. There are numerous examples of nations who even do not understand the meaning of a song
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, my mother does not understand English or any other language except Persian, despite
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; she loves Addle and asked me to download her
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songs
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 because she thinks so sensational and beautiful are her works.
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, to what has already been discussed in the above paragraphs I totally agree with the idea that
music
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 is the best way to bring different folks
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of
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 different ages and
colorful
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colourful
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 cultures together
due to
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 the reasons which I explained in
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