3.Some people say that drug companies have a responsibility to spend money on researching medicines that will help people in poorer countries. Others say the main responsibility of drug companies is to make money. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Pharmaceutical
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industry earns
enormous
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an enormous
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amount of
money
, annually. There is a debate over
if
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whether
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pharma
companies
are responsible
of
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for
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dedicating a part of their budget
for
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to
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developing products for under-developed nations or
they
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if they
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only
shall
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make as much profit
they
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as they
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can. Both ideas have relatively valid
arguements
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arguments
, namely humanitarian responsibility versus
shareholders
interests. Drug
companies
are believed to be responsible for people. Since they make a large amount of
money
out of humans' well-being, some argue that a part of their income shall be returned. Not only do pharma
companies
pay their fair share in total humanitarian
wellfare
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welfare
,
they
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but they
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frankly utilize their contribution as a "social
responsibilty
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responsibility
"
advertiesment
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advertising
campaign. The novel Covid-19 vaccines,
for example
, are developed through
a
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time and
resource consuming
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processes, but Pfizer-Biontech,
Asterazeneca
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AstraZeneca
, Moderna, and other
companies
provided their vaccines almost with zero profit to the public or even free to poorer countries.
Companies
, in their core endeavour, are only responsible for the profit of their
shareholders
.
This
notion is an accepted idea throughout the modern financial era. Pharmaceutical
companies
are no exception. In a "Capitalistic" world, pharma
companies
earn large
amount
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amounts
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of
money
and,
hence
are attractive for
shareholders
. their expenditure on
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research
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that
have
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no return is a major drawback for stakeholders.
Although
I agree that
companies
shall
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should
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make as much
money
as they can, and provide it to their
shareholders
, they have humanitarian
responsibilites
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responsibilities
, too. Counter-intuitively , the process of providing help to poorer countries is actually a profitable one. Pharmaceutical
companies
express themselves in
this
process.
Furthermore
, a mere Capitalist idea has failed in humanity. In conclusion,
while
the debate over
expenditure
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the expenditure
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of pharmaceutical
money
in poorer countries is an open discussion, I totally believe that it is essential for
such
companies
to provide zero-cost or zero-profit products to underprivileged nations.
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  • corporate social responsibility
  • sustainability
  • innovate
  • profitable
  • humanitarian
  • financial health
  • incentivizing
  • neglected diseases
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  • accessible
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