Many people today find that the cost of attaining university level education is extremely high for student and their family, what are the cause of this situation and how can governments, Universities and the student themselves overcome the problem?

With
passing
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the passing
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time
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of time
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, more and more adolescents desire to study at
university
,
however
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however,
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due to
cost
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the cost
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of studying
as well as
living, people suffer from them. The cause of
this
appear
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to be focused on two or three
are
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areas
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, and a number of solutions,
also
appear to be possible. Arguably, there could be reasons why
price
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the price
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of
university
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the university
a university
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is increasing.
Initially
, owing to obtaining tax from them by government,
for example
, in the UK, the state consistently
take
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levy from pupils
as a result
university
have got to
increasing
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increase
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cost
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the cost
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of studying for
students
.
This
pattern appears to be global, with the consequence that
students
or their families need to meet the costs directly. Another cause is the increasing of
cost
living in the urban city, meaning that the
cost
of
day to day
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life (
in addition
fees
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to fees
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) can be almost overwhelming for
students
. Eventually,
difficultly
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is finding
par-time
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part-time
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work
while
student
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the student
a student
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is studying.
Such
work tends to
poorly
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be poorly
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paid
,
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apply
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while
taking up time
the
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apply
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that
students
should merely utilize for their
study
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studies
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. Turning to
possible
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a possible
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solution, an obvious step would be to restore some element of state funding
courses
.
Although
public budgets are under pressure these days, if we took
this
step it would greatly ameliorate access to
courses
for people
in
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with
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lower
income
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incomes
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. A second remedy might be for
University
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the University
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to offer shorter
courses
like temporary
lesson
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lessons
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. If
such
courses
were available, it would reduce the issue of living expenses to some extent.
Moreover
,
government
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the government
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ought to create eclectic houses for
students
in
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apply
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near their
university
,
for instance
, First world countries, which established
apartment
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apartments
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for pupils
therefore
more and more individuals engage in study. In a nutshell,
together with
government and
individual
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individuals
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should fabricate some ways to decrease
cost
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the cost
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of living because
main
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the main
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reason is
price
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the price
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of living.
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