People are responsible for their happiness. Others feel happiness depends on other factors in their life. Discuss both views and give your opinion?
Issues related to
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enjoyment are frequently discussed these days. Correct article usage
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Although
some believe that people
are responsible for their happiness
, others criticize this
and argue that happiness
depends on other factors
. In the following paragraphs, both sides of this
statement will be discussed.
On the one hand, there are a variety of reasons why joyfulness should relate to our own. The principal reason is that you shouldn't let yourself rely on the
others too much. To explain, you should control yourself to be Correct article usage
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joyful
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a joyful
people
. Fix the agreement mistake
person
For instance
, one of the most popular happiness
in Buddhism is nirvana happened
by keep doing Wrong verb form
happens
the
meditation. Correct article usage
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Moreover
, people
who can control themselves to stay in good metal
health are likely to be far away from many mental Correct your spelling
mental
illness
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illnesses
such
as depression syndrome.
On the other hand
, some opponents may argue that there are many factors
that effect
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affect
to
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people
's contentment. The main reason for this
view is that people
are sad when they're in trouble or disappointment
. Replace the word
disappointed
In other words
, we live in the
world Correct article usage
a
with
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expectation
so Fix the agreement mistake
expectations
this
may cause unhappy feeling
when we miss the goal. Fix the agreement mistake
feelings
For example
, students who plan to entrance to
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the
universities Correct article usage
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do
not pass the Correct word choice
but do
requirement
are likely to live with their unhappiness until they can recover themselves.
To summarise, the two points of the argument concerning the Fix the agreement mistake
requirements
happiness
factors
. I am of the opinion that happiness
is depend
on many Change the verb form
depends
factors
that out
of our control. Add a missing verb
are out
However
, we should have a quickly recovering
before we get mental illness.Replace the word
quick recovery
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