The diagram shows how chocolate is produced.

The diagram shows how chocolate is produced.
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The pictures illustrate how liquid chocolate is produced. There are 10 steps in the pictures from growing cacao tree to pressing liquid chocolate.
The first step is
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that the cacao tree which has ripe red pods was grown in South America, Africa, and Indonesia.
Then
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ripe red pods with white cocoa
beans
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are harvested by farmers. After that,
beans
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are fermented. In the following step,
beans
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are spread in the sun to dry.
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dried
beans
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are put in large sacks. The second step is that sacks are transported by train or lorry, and they are taken to the factory. After the
beans
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are roasted,
beans
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are
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then
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crushed and the outer shells are removed.
Finally
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, the inner part of pressed liquid chocolate is produced.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words beans with synonyms.
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