Nowadays, most countries can improve the standard of living through economic development, but some social values are lost as a result. Do you think the advantages of this phenomenon outweigh the disadvantages?
In today’s time, many countries are
tried
to improve their life standards Wrong verb form
trying
by
economic growth but meanwhile ,it’s necessary to not disrupt their social values.Change preposition
through
This
development presents some threats but i
still believe that the advantages are far greater than those.
It’s important for every nation to make their economy much better Change the capitalization
I
with
time to time because it is a source of generating wealth. When Change preposition
from
nation’s
economy is going well Correct article usage
a nation’s
then
they have plenty options
to spend money on the Change preposition
of options
people
to improve their life standards up to the mark. They build new cities, town
, parks ,schools and Fix the agreement mistake
towns
hospital
with the idea of providing Fix the agreement mistake
hospitals
best
facilities Correct article usage
the best
as well as
improving their old areas with the idea of preserving the cultural heritage to gain maximum tourism activities which will also
help to make their economy work better. For instance
, European countries are earning too much money from foreign tourists. In addition
to that, we will also
not lose our
values which we Change the word
the
are getting
from our ancestors which Wrong verb form
get
links
us to the past Correct subject-verb agreement
link
so
Rephrase
apply
therefore
, it is our responsibility to conserve these to
the upcoming generation Change preposition
for
while
working on the
life standards.
Apart from that, sometimes we Correct article usage
apply
are only focus
on getting money and spending too much on infrastructure . Change the verb form
are only focused
are only focusing
For
example
If our country is good in any speciality Add a comma
example,
then
we will start making buildings to expand our development in the areas of old buildings instead
of preserving and renovate
them which Wrong verb form
renovating
belongs
to our forefathers. We need to understand that it is our identity which Correct subject-verb agreement
belong
reflect
Change the verb form
reflects
us
our old architectural work to the Correct pronoun usage
apply
people
but we demolished and impose
new buildings which will not merge Wrong verb form
imposed
to
the old architecture. Change preposition
with
However
, it gives you a new identity which indulge
us in chaos because we are forgetting our cultural traditions and Change the verb form
indulges
did
not hold our one identity.
Wrong verb form
do
To conclude
,working for the betterment of the people
is our primary goal to exceed in the world and facilitate their people
with every possible option.So,that’s why I believe that advantages
outweigh the potential drawbacks.Correct article usage
the advantages
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