Nowadays, most countries can improve the standard of living through economic development, but some social values are lost as a result. Do you think the advantages of this phenomenon outweigh the disadvantages?

In today’s time, many countries are
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to improve their life standards
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economic growth but meanwhile ,it’s necessary to not disrupt their social values.
This
development presents some threats but
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still believe that the advantages are far greater than those. It’s important for every nation to make their economy much better
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time to time because it is a source of generating wealth. When
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economy is going well
then
they have plenty
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to spend money on the
people
to improve their life standards up to the mark. They build new cities,
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, parks ,schools and
hospital
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with the idea of providing
best
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facilities
as well as
improving their old areas with the idea of preserving the cultural heritage to gain maximum tourism activities which will
also
help to make their economy work better.
For instance
, European countries are earning too much money from foreign tourists.
In addition
to that, we will
also
not lose
our
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values which we
are getting
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from our ancestors which
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us to the past
so
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therefore
, it is our responsibility to conserve these
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the upcoming generation
while
working on
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life standards. Apart from that, sometimes we
are only focus
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on getting money and spending too much on infrastructure .
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If our country is good in any speciality
then
we will start making buildings to expand our development in the areas of old buildings
instead
of preserving and
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them which
belongs
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to our forefathers. We need to understand that it is our identity which
reflect
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us
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our old architectural work to the
people
but we demolished and
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new buildings which will not merge
to
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the old architecture.
However
, it gives you a new identity which
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us in chaos because we are forgetting our cultural traditions and
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not hold our one identity.
To conclude
,working for the betterment of the
people
is our primary goal to exceed in the world and facilitate their
people
with every possible option.So,that’s why I believe that
advantages
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outweigh the potential drawbacks.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • standard of living
  • economic development
  • social values
  • materialism
  • community welfare
  • sustainable technologies
  • environmental degradation
  • social stratification
  • social cohesion
  • economic status
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