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Some people say that companies that sponsor big game gain a lot; while the others believe that it can become a disadvantage. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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Many people
argued
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 that organizations
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that
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who
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that
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funded
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fund
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 massive
game
events
 tend to
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receive
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received
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receive
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 a huge sum of feedback
while
 others believe that it
potrays
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portrays
 as a disadvantage. In
this
 essay, I will elaborate
each
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on each
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sides
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side
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 but personally, I strongly agree
upon
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with
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 the group that stated funding huge
game
events
 can impact a drawback to the
companies
itself
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themselves
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.
To begin
 with,
companies
 who
sponsored
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sponsor
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 big games
such
 as football and hockey competitions seek a recognizement of their brand to the
game
 audiences. To achieve the recognizement, usually it is in
a
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 form of commentary adlibs, merchandise, food trucks, to handing out free drinks to the
game
attendies
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attendees
. These
companies
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company's
companies'
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logo
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logos
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 or
name
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names
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 will
also
 be put on the players' jerseys in order
of
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to
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acknowledgement
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acknowledge
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 that they participate in funding the
game
events
 making them popular.
On the other hand
, the rise
popularity
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in popularity
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 that they get from the
game
events
 will attract
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a numbers
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numbers
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number
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 of
company
 competitors that eyeing for
a
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the
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 same purpose; raising their
company
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company's
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 popularity.
Whereas
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Companies
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companies
 would use
variety
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a variety
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methods
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of methods
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 to
threat
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threaten
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 their rivals
on
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by
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 either making their rival
faced
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face
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 a huge decline
on
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in
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 sales or spreading scandalous rumours in order to bring one's
company
 loose the public's trust and hit rock bottom.
To conclude
, despite becoming a well-known
company
 that shows
an
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exceptional results
which
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apply
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one's
company
 can gain a huge income in money and
also
 audiences. It impacted negatively, making possibilities for rival
companies
 to pull strings in order
bringing
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to bring
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 down a famous
company
 and
making
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put
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 themselves, the rival
companies
,
on
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in
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 the spotlight.
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