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People's shopping habit depends more on the age group they belong to than other factors. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is argued that the purchasing pattern of an individual relies more on his or her stage of life than on other aspects. I am not totally convinced that
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 could be an important factor that impacts people's buying style. Perhaps, it depends on the economic class
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 the mentality of consumers.
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 with, many companies target to acquire their customers by dividing them into financial tiers rather than
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 groups.
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 strategy is often successful because consumerism is mainly associated with the power of purchase of society.
On the other hand
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, focusing on
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 brackets, to sell the product, might not fulfil the sales figures because of the many dependencies of youngsters and older generations on adults.
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, shopping practices can not depend heavily upon
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 classifications. Leading car manufacturers like Tata, Hyundai and Suzuki,
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, are mainly concentrating on economic segments of the communities to increase their revenues from basic
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 luxury vehicles. Not only the class of people but
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 the attitude of a particular person heavily influences the style of buying something. Nowadays,
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 the advancement in technology, many leading organisations are fetching the behavioural patterns of humans through their social media interactions, and calculating their shopping routines. On account of the above research, related individuals are getting advertisements
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 their personalities.
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, there are three types of tendencies related to shopping habits in humans- shopaholic, semi-shopaholic and normal.
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, one of my friends is a shopping addict person and she has many unnecessary things at home.
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,
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age
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 could be one of the factors effective on anyone's purchase style, it can not be the decisive one.
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, other aspects like the buying capacity or perspective towards consumerism of mankind are more considerable.
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