The graph below shows the percentage of households with different kinds of technology in the U.S. from 1995 to 1999. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting themain features, and make comparisons whererelevant.Write at least 150 words.

The graph below shows the percentage of households with different kinds of technology in the U.S. from 1995 to 1999. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting themain features, and make comparisons whererelevant.Write at least 150 words.
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The line graph illustrates data about different technologies,
such
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as
satelite
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satellite
, cable, internet, and broadcast, that
used
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were used
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to
watching
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watch
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television in one US city from 2004 to 2014.
Overall
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,
while
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cable and
satelite
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satellite
technologies were major
trend
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trends
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for watching television
in
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at
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the beginning of the
period
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,
this
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trend
replaced
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was replaced
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by the internet in 2010. Meanwhile,
satelite
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satellite
technology shows
stable
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the stable
a stable
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trend. In 2004, Broadcasting was the main technology that nearly
90.000
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90,000
households used for watching TV. After that, it showed
steady
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a steady
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downward trajectory and reached almost 5.000 households in 2014.
People
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used
to
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apply
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cable technology
same
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the same
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as broadcasting
in
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at
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the beginning of the
period
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but after 2005, it reached
to
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apply
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almost 120.00
people
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and showed
constant
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a constant
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decrease to nearly 50.000
people
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at the end
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of the
period
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. At the beginning of the
period
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nearly hundreds of
people
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was
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were
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using
internet
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the internet
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for watching
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to watch
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TV but it
expreinced
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experienced
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a sharply
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sharply
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sharp
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rise throughout the
period
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and reached to
the
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apply
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highest point with 190.000 households in 2014.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words period, people with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage
  • households
  • technology
  • graph
  • 1995
  • 1999
  • televisions
  • computers
  • remained relatively stable
  • significant increase
  • surpassed
  • doubled
  • slight increase
  • suggests
  • growing trend
  • adoption
  • continued popularity
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