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Some people say that people should keep all their earnings and don't have to pay taxes to government. Do you agree or disagree with then statement

#people #earnings #taxes #government
Authorities have gathered
taxes
 from the early stages of governance in human history. Despite
this
 historical depth, there
are
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 a group of
people
 who argue that
citizens
shall
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should
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 keep their money and
governments
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that governments
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 should not collect
taxes
. I strongly oppose
this
 idea, simply because of two reasons.
First,
tax
 is the main or only income for many
governments
 around the world, and
second,
I believe
governments
 are responsible for social justice.
Majority
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The majority
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 of modern countries around the world rely on
people
's
taxes
. Apart from the regions with large reserves of natural assets, like oil and gas,
taxes
is
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are
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 the main source of money for
governments
 to build amenities, provide healthcare and free education,
and
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apply
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etc.
For instance
, "
Tax
-payers dollars" is one of the most used phrases in
the
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US politics. Politicians,
as well as
 average
citizens
, use
this
 phrase to emphasize the notion that the expenditure targets
shall
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are
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 worth American
Tax
-payers' money. In fact, the reliance of
governments
 on
people
's
tax
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taxes
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 empowers the
people
. In a nutshell,
governments
 are responsible for their
citizens
, and
such
 responsibility relies mostly on the very
citizens
'
taxes
.
Governments
 shall maintain
a
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social justice and equity, too. Many
people
 earn their valuable assets through
hard-working
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hard work
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 and dedication,
it
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but it
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 does not necessarily imply the reverse path. Many hardworking
labor
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labour
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 forces live in poverty and authorities shall bring the basic, whatever is defined as, human rights.
People
's
taxes
 enable
government
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the government
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 to spend back into
the
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society to enhance poorer
population's
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population
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 lives. In fact, rich
citizens
 who are paying
more
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a higher
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 percentage of their income rely on public amenities, too. Without a proper taxation process, there will be no water, electricity, or roads. In Northern European countries, where
high
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a high
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 amount of
tax
 is collected from
people
, almost every citizen enjoys a zero-cost decent healthcare, education, and housing. In conclusion, I see no positive points in opposing the taxation process. Frankly,
taxes
 are the sole source of income for many
governments
,
furthermore
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furthermore,
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governments
, dependent or independent of
people
's
tax
, are responsible for all of the citizen's well-being.
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