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Some people say that people should keep all their earnings and don't have to pay taxes to government. Do you agree or disagree with then statement

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Authorities have gathered
taxes
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 from the early stages of governance in human history. Despite
this
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 historical depth, there
are
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 a group of
people
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 who argue that
citizens
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shall
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should
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 keep their money and
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governments
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that governments
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 should not collect
taxes
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. I strongly oppose
this
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 idea, simply because of two reasons.
First,
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tax
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 is the main or only income for many
governments
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 around the world, and
second,
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I believe
governments
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 are responsible for social justice.
Majority
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The majority
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 of modern countries around the world rely on
people
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's
taxes
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. Apart from the regions with large reserves of natural assets, like oil and gas,
taxes
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is
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 the main source of money for
governments
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 to build amenities, provide healthcare and free education,
and
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apply
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etc.
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, "
Tax
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-payers dollars" is one of the most used phrases in
the
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US politics. Politicians,
as well as
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 average
citizens
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, use
this
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 phrase to emphasize the notion that the expenditure targets
shall
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 worth American
Tax
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-payers' money. In fact, the reliance of
governments
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 on
people
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's
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tax
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taxes
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 empowers the
people
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. In a nutshell,
governments
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 are responsible for their
citizens
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, and
such
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 responsibility relies mostly on the very
citizens
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'
taxes
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.
Governments
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 shall maintain
a
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social justice and equity, too. Many
people
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 earn their valuable assets through
hard-working
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 and dedication,
it
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but it
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 does not necessarily imply the reverse path. Many hardworking
labor
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labour
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 forces live in poverty and authorities shall bring the basic, whatever is defined as, human rights.
People
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's
taxes
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 enable
government
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the government
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 to spend back into
the
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society to enhance poorer
population's
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population
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 lives. In fact, rich
citizens
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 who are paying
more
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a higher
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 percentage of their income rely on public amenities, too. Without a proper taxation process, there will be no water, electricity, or roads. In Northern European countries, where
high
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a high
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 amount of
tax
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 is collected from
people
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, almost every citizen enjoys a zero-cost decent healthcare, education, and housing. In conclusion, I see no positive points in opposing the taxation process. Frankly,
taxes
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 are the sole source of income for many
governments
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,
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furthermore
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governments
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, dependent or independent of
people
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's
tax
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, are responsible for all of the citizen's well-being.
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