Some people think problems with traffic and housing in the city centre can be solved by moving companies and their employees in the countryside.

Traffic
and housing problems in urban
cities
can be solved by locating major
companies
and their workers
to
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the
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rural areas. In
this
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I will describe why I completely support the idea of transferring
companies
to the countryside. Nowadays,
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number
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of vehicles on
road
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, in large
cities
have
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been causing
traffic
jams. It is a problem as people get late for their jobs. Sometimes, even the ambulance gets stuck
due to
congestion.
Also
, there is a parking problem as these large
companies
have many employees and almost every worker has their own
cars
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.
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, statistically 40% of patients die because of these issues.
In
addition
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there are many other factors that lead to
traffic
congestions
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congestion
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and one of them is small roads, which
is
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are
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leading to different parts of the town.
Additionally
, if there is any accident on that
roads
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,
then
the general working class will remain stuck in
traffic
for hours. I believe that
moving
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companies
to remote areas,
traffic
jams
also
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reduces
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.
On the contrary
, professionally designed and structured buildings need much more space than a house. These corporations
also
require huge parking.
Moreover
, there are many large factories which contribute to air pollution.
Due to
the limited space in the
cities
, there are not many trees to tackle the problem of air pollution.
Furthermore
,
cities
have not only large
companies
or buildings but
also
better schools and transportation
system
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.
Therefore
, these facilities make urban areas more crowded, as if
this
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things are moving to the countryside, it would help reduce
rush
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in
cities
.
Thus
it can be solved by shifting
companies
and other businesses to the village sides. In conclusion, moving to
the
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rural area is a good idea to reduce the overcrowded in urban
cities
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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