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35.Music has always been and continues to be the universal language of mankind. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is argued that
music
 is a worldwide language for all humans.
This
 essay agrees with
this
 statement because
music
 expresses feelings and can link
people
.
People
 from all countries can listen to any type of
music
.
This
 is because
music
 expresses feelings and every country and place even though their language
are
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 different, the feelings of all
people
 are the same, so that the
music
 can be understood by everyone. Emotions can be appreciated even if
people
 do not understand the lyrics, since the melodies express emotions, happiness and sadness can be easily analyzed in all songs. Recent research concluded that around 90% of Chinese
people
 listen to
music
 from other countries and most of them do not really know what the song lyrics
is
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 saying, but they still like it. A common attribute that all type of
music
 has, is that brings
people
 together. Whether dancing with
music
 or singing.
Music
 can be found in many different ceremonies and important dates, and some of those melodies are used in all places,
this
 makes a strong link between all
people
 around the world.
For example
, all countries have their own lyrics for birthday
song
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,
wedding
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 and Christmas but they use the same theme, melody and tune, since all
people
 use the same
music
, it creates a stronger relationship between individuals from different nations. In conclusion, everyone can listen to the same song and like it or not and
this
 allows the joint of
people
 from different places, and I
therefore
, believe that
music
 is an international language.
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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