The Line graph shows the average number of weekly patients visiting four clinics of a hospital from 2010 to 2016.

The Line graph shows the average number of weekly patients visiting four clinics of a hospital from 2010 to 2016.
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The given line chart illustrates how many
patients
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were visited in a week on average in the four clinics between 2010 and 2016. At the outset, the three sectors (birth control, eye, diabetic) increased the number of
patients
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in starting but only one sector (dental) decreased its
patients
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.
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, these numbers fluctuated in
next
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six years. In 2010, birth control was the dominant sector which people visited the most but in the end, they finished at the second most going department around 240
patients
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in
period
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of 2010.
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, eye
clinic
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clinics
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started to rise from the beginning and surpassed
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birth control around 2013 with 200 plus
patients
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and
come
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to an end
around
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350
patients
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in 2016. The remaining two sectors formed opposite
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from each other. Dental was the only sector which started to decline from the beginning and
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continued to increase and crossed the diabatic in 2013.
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figure
then
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remained stable approximately.
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,
diabetic
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rose from the initial stage and
then
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levelled off over a period of two years
then
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grew in
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an upwards
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upwards
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direction sharply and stopped at 180
patients
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in 2016.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words patients with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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