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The chart below shows the water levels of 6 cities in Australia in October 2009 and 2010.

The chart below shows the water levels of 6 cities in Australia in October 2009 and 2010.
The bar chart illustrates the percentage of maximum levels of
water
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 in the
water
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 repository of six distinct
cities
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 in Australia between
October
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 2009 and the same month in 2010.
Overall
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, in all
cities
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, the
water
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 volume in
October
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 2010 was more than in
October
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 2009 except in Darwin and Brisbane City, where
water
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 levels in cisterns were less than in
October
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 2009 and the same in both years, respectively. In
October
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 2009, Canberra and Sydney accounted for the highest amount of
water
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 levels at roughly 75 per cent for both
cities
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 and
then
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 it rose to approximately 80 and 100 per cent, respectively.
Likewise
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, the
water
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 amount in Melbourne and Perth, at almost 25 and 40%, was less than in other towns in 2009. Afterwards, both
cities
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 experienced moderate growth of around 10 and 20% in
October
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 2010.
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,
water
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 quantity in Darwin declined from around 45% to just below 30% during the period,
while
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 it remained constant in Brisbane municipality.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, cities, october with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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