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In 1985, among the Chinese the most consumed product was fish.

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In 1985, among the
Chinese
 the most consumed product was
fish
. In contradistinction to
meat
,
fish
 it's the most common product in China
,
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 because China is a leader in fisheries. From 1985 to 2010
fish
 was rosed almost twice, from 600
grams
 to 850. 600
grams
 of
fish
 was consumed by
average
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chinese
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, but
meat
 and
salt
 even combined were lower than
fish
. In contradistinction to
meat
, consumption of
salt
was
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decreased from 500
grams
 to 200
grams
, during 1985-2010. And
meat
 consumption, as opposed to
salt
, has increased from 100
grams
 to 200
grams
, in the same period as
fish
 and
salt
. In summary,
Chinese
 people were very serious
on
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 their diet, we can notice that most
of
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the chinese
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chinese
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people
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 body structure is
slims
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, thin and petite.
Reason
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of
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for
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 their thin - it's
because
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that
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 they eat
fishes
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fish
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 with
low
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a low
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salt
concentration
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concentrations
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 in their meal.
To
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In
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 comparison,
meat
have
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has
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high
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a high
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salt
concetration
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concentration
concentrations
.
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