This graph shows how the population change from 1940 to 2000 in three different counties of U.S Columbia, Yamhill and Washington ,so lets write about this graph.
This
graph shows how the population
change from 1940 to 2000 in three different counties of U.S
Correct your spelling
U.S.
Columbia
, Yamhill
and Washington
,so lets
write about Replace the word
let's
let us
this
graph.
At start
of Add an article
the start
1940
Add a comma
1940,
the
Correct article usage
apply
Columbia
had the lowest quantity of people compared of
Change preposition
to
others
regions of America , 25,000 . at Correct quantifier usage
other
this
time the
Correct article usage
apply
Yamhill
had a
30,000 and Correct article usage
apply
Washington
had 75,000.
in 1970 Columbias
Change noun form
Columbia's
population
rised
to 36.000 Correct your spelling
rose
raised
rise
this
Capitalize word
This
is mean
that Wrong verb form
means
Correct article usage
the Columbias
Columbias
Change noun form
Columbia's
Columbias'
population
increased to 50 percents
! At the time Fix the agreement mistake
percent
Yamhills
Change noun form
Yamhill's
Yamhills'
population
became
from 30.000 to 45.000 . Verb problem
increased
This
is mean
that Wrong verb form
means
Yamhills
Change noun form
Yamhill's
population
increased to 50% like a
Correct article usage
apply
Columbia
. by
the way Capitalize word
By
Washington
make
a Wrong verb form
made
biggest
step than Correct word choice
bigger
the
Correct article usage
apply
Columbia
and Yamhill
, from 75.000 to 125.000 from 1970 to 2000 the graph show us that the population
of Columbia
and Yamhill
goes
approximately the same amounts that they had increased by the thirty years before. Verb problem
shows
At
the years from the years Change preposition
In
Washingtom
had always Correct your spelling
Washington
more
Add a missing verb
had more
population
from Columbia
and Yamhill
.
In
1940 to 1970 the Change preposition
From
population
of Washington
rose gradually . and between 1970 to 2000 the rose climbed sharply. the population
growth of Columbia
and Yamhill
always
been almost the same. any way.Add a missing verb
has always
Submitted by dnm.best on
Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.
Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
▼
Linking words: Add some linking words.
▼
Linking words: Add more linking words.
▼
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
▼
Vocabulary: Replace the words population, columbia, yamhill, washington with synonyms.
▼
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
▼
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "change" in your introduction.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
▼
Ultimate Speaking practice for IELTS
Practice speaking step by step, answer real-life questions, and build your confidence. Start your free trial and improve your speaking skills today!