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This graph shows how the population change from 1940 to 2000 in three different counties of U.S Columbia, Yamhill and Washington ,so lets write about this graph.

This graph shows how the population change from 1940 to 2000 in three different counties of U.S Columbia, Yamhill and Washington ,so lets write about this graph.
#population #change #three #counties #columbia #yamhill #washington
This
 graph shows how the
population
 change from 1940 to 2000 in three different counties of
U.S
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U.S.
Columbia
,
Yamhill
 and
Washington
 ,so
lets
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 write about
this
 graph. At
start
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 of
1940
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1940,
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the
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Columbia
 had the lowest quantity of people compared
of
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others
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other
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 regions of America , 25,000 . at
this
 time
the
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Yamhill
 had
a
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30,000 and
Washington
 had 75,000. in 1970
Columbias
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population
rised
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rose
raised
rise
 to 36.000
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 that
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the Columbias
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Columbias
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population
 increased to 50
percents
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! At the time
Yamhills
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Yamhill's
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population
became
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increased
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 from 30.000 to 45.000 .
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 that
Yamhills
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Yamhill's
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population
 increased to 50% like
a
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Columbia
.
by
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 the way
Washington
make
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 a
biggest
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bigger
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 step than
the
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Columbia
 and
Yamhill
 , from 75.000 to 125.000 from 1970 to 2000 the graph show us that the
population
 of
Columbia
 and
Yamhill
goes
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shows
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 approximately the same amounts that they had increased by the thirty years before.
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 the years from the years
Washingtom
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Washington
 had always
more
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population
 from
Columbia
 and
Yamhill
.
In
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 1940 to 1970 the
population
 of
Washington
 rose gradually . and between 1970 to 2000 the rose climbed sharply. the
population
 growth of
Columbia
 and
Yamhill
always
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has always
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 been almost the same. any way.
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