Happiness is considered very important in life. Why is it difficult to define? What factors are important in achieving happiness?

Few nations take interest in local transport to give them first priority which means they do not prefer
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their own
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vehicle
transportation
. In my opinion, it is beneficial and my justification will come in
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the next
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paragraphas
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paragraphs
paragraph
and
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also
I will discuss both points of
views
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view
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and give some relative examples. To commence with, there are several reasons why some countries promote public transport
instead
of personal
vehicle
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vehicles
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.
Firstly
, there are increasing number of vehicles which create
lost
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lots
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of pollution in
environment
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the environment
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and people find traffic
jam
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jams
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in many places.
For instance
,
growing
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a growing
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number of personal vehicles are not suitable for any emergency situation
that
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apply
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time
individuals find traffic problems
which
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can be
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a wast
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wast
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waste
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of their lots of
time
.
Secondly
, poor citizens can not afford their own
vehicle
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vehicles
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therefore
they rely on public
transportation
.
Thirdly
, the majority of
public
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getting
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late and
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their workplace or students
are
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not prefer
this
kind of environment.
Furthermore
, the government want to increase their source of money from taxes, toll tax
and
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emergency used equipment and accident insurance.
Moreover
, public
transportation
not only
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cut down
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number
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the number
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of accident
happen
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that happen
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but
also
increase
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the ecomony
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ecomony
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economy
.
On the other hand
,
by
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promoting public transport there are some disadvantages there of
local
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the local
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poublic
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public
. All human beings
used
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bus
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buses
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,
coach
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coaches
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and
train
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trains
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then
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individuals
not
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do not
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find their comfort zone and they need to wait longer
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times
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and
crowded
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in crowded
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places in trains.
In addition
, native people
moveing forwad
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moving forward
and
buy
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buying
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their personal
vehicle
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vehicles
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for their
time
management,
efficiency
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and efficiency
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and whenever they need at that timethey use their personal
vehicle
. To recapitulate, the
administrative
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should encourage people to
used
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use
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public
transportation
but they
also
need to follow
rules
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the rules
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of public
transportation
time table
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timetable
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and many more. Eventually, they should
analyzing
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analyse
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data
of
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on
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personal
vehicle
use.
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