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The two maps below represent the changes in town of Denham from 1986 to the present day.

The two maps below represent the changes in town of Denham from 1986 to the present day.
The two maps below represent the changes in
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town
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the town
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 of Denham from 1986 to the present day. In 1986, the
town
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 was a much farmland area with a less number of
houses
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,
a
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apply
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shops,
gardens
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and gardens
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,
nevertheless
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during
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apply
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the
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apply
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today Denham experienced a number of dramatic changes. It is apparently seen that
sufficient
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a sufficient
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 amount of farmlands turned into individual
houses
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. From that we can see,
agriculture
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that agriculture
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 decreased.
Further
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 developments were the construction of a retirement home near the primary school. On the site of the former
east-garden
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east garden
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 with
a large
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large houses
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houses
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.
Also
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, the shops were cleared to make way for a huge amount of
houses
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. Only
post
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the post
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 office and primary school are saved till now. For me, there are too many
houses
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 in the
town
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.
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Instead
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Instead,
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 it would be possible to build shopping malls, playgrounds, high
school
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schools
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, car parking facilities and a park. If in Denham are an exceeded number of people, it would be better to build skyscrapers.
Overall
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, a comparison of the two maps reveals a change from
an
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apply
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agricultural land to a
town
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 full of
house
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houses
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.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words town, houses with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "represent" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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