The two maps below represent the changes in town of Denham from 1986 to the present day.

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The two maps below represent the changes in

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town

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the town

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of Denham from 1986 to the present day. In 1986, the

town

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was a much farmland area with a less number of

houses

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apply

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shops,

gardens

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and gardens

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nevertheless

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during

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the

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today Denham experienced a number of dramatic changes. It is apparently seen that

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amount of farmlands turned into individual

houses

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. From that we can see,

agriculture

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that agriculture

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decreased.

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developments were the construction of a retirement home near the primary school. On the site of the former

east-garden

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with

a large

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large houses

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houses

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, the shops were cleared to make way for a huge amount of

houses

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. Only

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office and primary school are saved till now. For me, there are too many

houses

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in the

town

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Instead

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it would be possible to build shopping malls, playgrounds, high

school

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schools

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, car parking facilities and a park. If in Denham are an exceeded number of people, it would be better to build skyscrapers.

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, a comparison of the two maps reveals a change from

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agricultural land to a

town

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full of

house

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houses

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Vocabulary: Replace the words town, houses with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "represent" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

178 words

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The two maps below represent the changes in town of Denham from 1986 to the present day.

In their advertising, buisness usually emphasize that their products are new in some ways. Why is this? Do you think its positive or negative development.

Some people think that children should only read academic books. others believe that reading books for entertainment is equally important. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

In most countries, with the widespread of the use of Internet, people have more freedom to choose to work at home instead of travelling to work. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

Students should pay the full cost for their own study, because university education benefits individual rather than society. To what extent do you agree or disagree.