The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.
The line chart illustrates the
number
of
people
who visited islands and
cruise
ships
between 2010 and 2017
Overall
, the
number
of
people
who travel on the island rose between 2012 and 2019
while
higher than on
cruise
ships
in 2016.
On the other hand
, the
number
of
people
staying on
cruise
ships
remained between 2013 and 2015.
However
, since 2010, the
number
of
tourists
has significantly increased. In 2012, the
number
of
tourists
who stayed on the island was 0.25
million
, compared to 1.25
million
who chose to stay on
cruise
ships
so there was a substantial difference in numbers at
this
time. By 2015, the figure had a stable increase on the
islandm
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island
islands
after the next year the
number
of
people
who visited the island was more than
cruise
ships
around 1.5
million
tourists
. Since 2013, the
number
of
tourists
has not changed as much on
cruise
chips until 2015. After the next year,
people
chose that decreased to around 1.25
million
.
Although
peoples
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people
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choused
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chose
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cruise
ships
was not increased
Verb problem
,
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the
number
of total
tourists
was stable
rose
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and rose
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steadily until the end of the data.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, people, cruise, ships, tourists, million with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 8 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuation
  • peak
  • trough
  • upward trend
  • downward trend
  • steady increase
  • sharp decline
  • seasonal variation
  • cruise ship visitors
  • island stay visitors
  • economic impact
  • environmental impact
  • tourism industry
  • sustainable tourism
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