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In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#future #nobody #newspapers #books
With progressing technology, e-
books
 and news have become more accessible to people and in recent years individuals have demonstrated considerable inclination toward reading them
instead
 of paying money for printed
books
 or newspapers. I, partly agree with
this
 issue as
,
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 it would not be proper in all situations.
To begin
 with, I think the most significant benefit of
this
 approach is helping the betterment of
environment
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, and to some extent
reduce
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 the human effects on it.
In other words
, taking
this
 measure would prevent the redundant use of natural resources and money, and people can save them for future generations. To illustrate
this
, when I decided to enhance my English language I downloaded my required
books
 from the internet which helped me to save money tremendously.
Furthermore
, the accessibility and convenience
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 using them have made them possible to read all over the world.
In particular
, online audio
books
 have enlarged the benefits and attracted much attention.
On the other hand
, staring at the monitor screen or cell phone for a long time may have some adverse effects
to
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 readers’ health.
For instance
, it may weaken
readers
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 eyesight or cause backache.
In addition
, as reading
book
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 from
the
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 laptop or cell phone screen may be boring or tedious, children and adolescents may not have a tendency to perform in
this
 way, Because, the importance of
this
 issue is not perceivable to them yet.
This
 may discourage them
of
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 reading. In conclusion, there are tremendous benefits in reading
books
 online and can help the betterment of the Earth and creatures.
however
, I think it would not be proper for all age groups.
Thus
,it would be better to explore
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every policy wisely and
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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • cost-effective
  • cultural value
  • sentimental value
  • reliability
  • distracting
  • access to
  • digital devices
  • internet
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