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Write about the following topic: Many people try to achieve success through their career or education. What can success mean to different people? What is your view of success?

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Everybody defines for themselves what
success
 means to them,
however
, often it is related to education or career. Personally, my associations with
success
 have some additional
dimentions
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dimensions
dimension
 that I am going to talk about in
this
 essay. With
success
, comes a feeling of satisfaction and confidence,
therefore
,
vast
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 majority of people are driven by positive outcomes. To some, moving forward on their career path and getting higher
payment
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 means
success
. When individuals pay all their
depths
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depth
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 and support,
for instance
, their parents financially, they feel
success
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.
On the contrary
, for
some
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 the feeling of it comes, when they see
results
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the results
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 of their work regardless of
wheter
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whether
 it is related to academic scores or personal life.
Overall
, it can be said that
success
 is a positive feeling
that is
 felt by a person when achieving something.
In addition
 to those meanings,
success
 can be found everywhere. It does not have to be a huge achievement in life for me to feel empowered. The greatest one,
however
, relates to using my full potential in life, finding my passion or positively affecting the world with the work I will do in the future.
Success
 for me is something personal, which should not be bragged about.
To conclude
,
success
 has different meanings,
however
, for all
the
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people it is associated with positive outcomes and the feeling that comes with them. For me, it is a personal thing related to my personal achievements.
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