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In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or a negative situation?

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Currently, in many countries, owning a
home
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 rather than renting one is important for many
people
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. I believe
this
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 helps to maintain their financial status in society.
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, it can be seen as a negative effect that many have to depend on housing loans
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 of that. By owning a
home
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,
people
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 can show off their status. Nowadays, the price of houses is increasing day by day.
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 of that,
people
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 have to spend quite a lot of
money
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 in order to own a
house
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. Because of the higher prices of houses,
people
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 of high or middle income are capable of owning one. As an example, in Sri Lankan society, for men, owning a
home
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 under their name is a critical factor in being selected as a groom, and even women consider those men capable of giving them a comfortable life.
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, owning a
house
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 is about spending a large sum of
money
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. Because of that, many
people
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 have to take out housing loans with
high interest
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 rates.
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 the end, they have to pay interest for their entire lives just to own a
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. Not only
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that, but even for the maintenance and renovations,
people
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 have to spend quite a lot of
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 from their income. As an example, some years later, the design of the
house
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 goes out of fashion.
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 of that, the
house
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 owner has to update it by spending a large sum of
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. In conclusion, even though in many
counties
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, owning a
home
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 helps to show off their financial status, it leads to many negative effects
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 the end.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • renting
  • importance
  • sense of security
  • stability
  • financial investment
  • asset
  • customize
  • decorate
  • belonging
  • community
  • potential
  • future generations
  • long-term
  • cost advantage
  • control
  • living space
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