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The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities.

The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities.
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The presented map
provide
Correct subject-verb agreement
provides
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 the development
for
Change preposition
of
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 an
island
Use synonyms
 before and after
build
Wrong verb form
building
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 the tourist facilities.
Overall
Linking Words
it is clear that
Linking Words
 before
built
Wrong verb form
the building
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that
Correct word choice
apply
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the
island
Use synonyms
 dose not contain any useful buildings.
in contrast
Linking Words
 ,after built the facilities it
become
Wrong verb form
became
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 an Entertaining place. Looking in more detail , it is noticeable
that
Linking Words
is
Unnecessary verb
apply
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before
constructed
Replace the word
construction
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any
Correct quantifier usage
apply
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that
Correct determiner usage
the
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island
Use synonyms
does
Wrong verb form
did
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 not contain any type of building that people who
will visit
Wrong verb form
visited
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this
Linking Words
island
Use synonyms
can
Wrong verb form
could
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 use
it
Correct pronoun usage
apply
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, it was only about
earth
Add an article
the earth
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 and some plants. Looking more
in
Change preposition
at
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 the
changing
Replace the word
change
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,
it is clear that
Linking Words
island
Use synonyms
now
Add a missing verb
is now
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 becomes
more
Change the word
apply
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better than before, because now includes a lot of facilities
such
Linking Words
 as houses to live
and
Change preposition
in and
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 it is widespread an
all
Add a hyphen
all-island
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island
Use synonyms
also
Linking Words
 , reception and one restaurant which
very
Add a missing verb
is very
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 close to reception
Linking Words
further more
Correct your spelling
furthermore
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 now there are tow boats in the sea .
Linking Words
Moreover
Add a comma
Moreover,
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 there is
pier
Add an article
a pier
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 which
built
Add a missing verb
is built
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 to relate a reception with see .
Also
Linking Words
 now there is
swimming
Add an article
a swimming
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 pool
in
Change preposition
on
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 the southeast side near
to
Change preposition
apply
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the beach.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, it is clear that".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words island with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • island
  • before and after
  • construction
  • tourist facilities
  • maps
  • changes
  • comparison
  • description
  • implications
  • personal opinion
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