The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities.
The presented map
provide
the development Correct subject-verb agreement
provides
for
an Change preposition
of
island
before and after build
the tourist facilities.
Wrong verb form
building
Overall
it is clear that
before built
Wrong verb form
the building
that
the Correct word choice
apply
island
dose not contain any useful buildings. in contrast
,after built the facilities it become
an Entertaining place.
Looking in more detail , it is noticeable Wrong verb form
became
that
is
before Unnecessary verb
apply
constructed
Replace the word
construction
any
Correct quantifier usage
apply
that
Correct determiner usage
the
island
does
not contain any type of building that people who Wrong verb form
did
will visit
Wrong verb form
visited
this
island
can
useWrong verb form
could
it
, it was only about Correct pronoun usage
apply
earth
and some plants.
Looking more Add an article
the earth
in
the Change preposition
at
changing
, Replace the word
change
it is clear that
island
now
becomes Add a missing verb
is now
more
better than before, because now includes a lot of facilities Change the word
apply
such
as houses to live and
it is widespread an Change preposition
in and
all
Add a hyphen
all-island
island
also
, reception and one restaurant which very
close to reception Add a missing verb
is very
further more
now there are tow boats in the sea . Correct your spelling
furthermore
Moreover
there is Add a comma
Moreover,
pier
which Add an article
a pier
built
to relate a reception with see . Add a missing verb
is built
Also
now there is swimming
pool Add an article
a swimming
in
the southeast side near Change preposition
on
to
the beach.Change preposition
apply
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, it is clear that".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words island with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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