The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities.

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The presented map

provide

Correct subject-verb agreement

provides

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the development

for

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island

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before and after

build

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building

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the tourist facilities.

Overall

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it is clear that

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before

built

Wrong verb form

the building

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that

Correct word choice

apply

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the

island

Use synonyms

dose not contain any useful buildings.

in contrast

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,after built the facilities it

become

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became

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an Entertaining place. Looking in more detail , it is noticeable

that

Linking Words

Unnecessary verb

apply

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before

constructed

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construction

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any

Correct quantifier usage

apply

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that

Correct determiner usage

the

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island

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does

Wrong verb form

did

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not contain any type of building that people who

will visit

Wrong verb form

visited

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this

Linking Words

island

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can

Wrong verb form

could

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use

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apply

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, it was only about

earth

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the earth

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and some plants. Looking more

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the

changing

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change

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it is clear that

Linking Words

island

Use synonyms

now

Add a missing verb

is now

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becomes

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apply

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better than before, because now includes a lot of facilities

such

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as houses to live

and

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in and

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it is widespread an

all

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all-island

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island

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also

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, reception and one restaurant which

very

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is very

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close to reception

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further more

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furthermore

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now there are tow boats in the sea .

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Moreover

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Moreover,

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there is

pier

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a pier

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which

built

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is built

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to relate a reception with see .

Also

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now there is

swimming

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a swimming

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pool

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the southeast side near

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apply

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the beach.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, it is clear that".

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Vocabulary: Replace the words island with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.

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9
Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
29
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

167 words

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island
before and after
construction
tourist facilities
maps
changes
comparison
description
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The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities.

Nowadays,many people choose to be self-employed,rather than to work for a company or organisation.why might this be the case?what could be the disadvantage of being self-employed?

6. International tourism has led to an huge increase in the number of visitors to many historical sites around the world. To what extent is this a positive or negative phenomenon?