Some people think that the media have the right to publish details of people's view, while others think it should be managed. Discuss both views.

A significant number of people hold the perception that the
press
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the power
in publishing
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thorough information
of
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individuals
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assertion,
nevertheless
, another school of thought
also
share the sentiment that
this
trend should be mitigated.
This
essay will totally endorse the former view,
however
, the two opposing sentiments will
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in the following paragraphs after which a logical conclusion will be drawn. On the one hand, when the media
expose
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mankind info, it can put lives in danger. To elaborate, a young man in my
neighborhood
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was beaten to death because of
bad
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comment he made.
This
trend occurred
as a result
of the
press
exposing
such
comments
as well as
his background. If
such
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phenomenon
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continues,
then
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individual
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will lose trust in the media. Admittedly, exposure of
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data will put people in their early graves.
On the other hand
, it is blatant that mankind
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famous when newspapers showcase
a thorough information
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about the populace. To explicate, Twene Jonas used to be an ordinary person but after he started addressing issues concerning
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Ghanaians
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citizens and the
press
posting it on their various platforms, he became
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well-known. Despite the fact that humans
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be famous, the background of the citizens can not be put in danger.
By contrast
, there
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myriad of ways one can be a celebrity
such
as helping the needy.
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, research conducted by non organization two years ago revealed that sixty per cent of people end up being famous when supporting the needy. In conclusion, after examining the two contradictory views, I strongly believe that
humans
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live
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will be at risk when
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and
therefore
, it should be stopped. In view of
this
, I recommend that
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should come out with different ways of posting one's data.
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