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Some people think that scientists experimenting with animals in the laboratory is the only way we can guarantee new products will be safe for human use to what extent do you agree or disagree

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 are far more than humans.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • guarantee
  • safe
  • human use
  • scientists
  • experimenting
  • laboratory
  • animal testing
  • valuable information
  • alternative methods
  • equally effective
  • product safety
  • ethical concerns
  • cruel
  • inhumane
  • technologies
  • advancements
  • research
  • reduce
  • replace
  • regulations
  • guidelines
  • ethical treatment
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