The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.
The bar graph sketches out the final report of
coffee
and
tea
in five Australian
cities
in which they analyzed the buying and drinking capacities of the individuals.
Overall
, it can clearly be observed that in all
cities
,
people
went to
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more frequently to drink
coffee
or
tea
.
Moreover
, the only exception to
this
chart was the fresh
coffee
which declined as compared to others. In three
cities
,
people
went to the cafes to drink
coffee
or
tea
in the previous four weeks, around 64 % in Melbourne, which was the highest rate, 63% in Hobart and 61% in Sydney.
On the other hand
, instant
coffee
was more preferred in Hobart which was 54 % as compared to others.
However
,
People
were less interested in fresh
coffee
to buy in Hobart
instead
of Sydney and Melbourne where the demand was higher. In Adelaide, instant
coffee
and
people
who prefer to go
into
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cafes were approximately
same
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which was around 50 %.
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, the percentage of fresh
coffee
were
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low and stood at around 34 %.
In contrast
, Brisbane was in high demand in both categories
like
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mostly
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people
travelled towards the cafes to drink
coffee
and
tea
around 56% and bought instant
coffee
53%.
Similarly
,
the
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fresh
coffee
was
also
the lowest in Brisbane and
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other
cities
also
experienced
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Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, tea, cities, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.

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