37.Some people think that cultural traditions will be destroyed when they are used as money-making machines aimed at tourists, other people believes that it is the only way to save such traditions in the world today. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.
Some say that making money from cultural
tradiction
will destroy their indigenous Correct your spelling
tradition
traditions
culture
, while
others would argue that is
a way of rescuing these traditions
. This
essay would argue that although
there will be a difference compared to reality, it will allow more people
to know about their existance
.
Commercialization can result in the dilution of the authenticity of the Correct your spelling
existence
traditions
,
since they are adapted to the tourists’ tastes and what Remove the comma
apply
do
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This
can lead to misunderstanding about how the culture
really is. Since when only focusing in
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cultures
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culture
For example
, there is a minority ethnic group in China called Miao Zu, their custom is full of silver decorations, the reason why they dress like this
is because the higher amount of decoration made of silver or gold,
means the richer they are, so when they get married the others know about it, since it said that the richer someone is, the better life they will have. But when Remove the comma
apply
people
get to China and wear these clothes, they do not know the culture
, the only thing they know is that it looks good. However
, I believe that this
can be easily solved by adding some information before people
try to be involved in another culture
.
On the other hand
, there are countries that have many cultural traditions
, but there are some that
is
only followed by a few Change the verb form
are
people
, because as the years go by, some families are not very closed
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the Change preposition
to
culture
of their ancestors, so they decide to not follow it, causing fewer people
following these traditions
. So the possibility of allowing visitors to try their customs and culture
can let more people
know about it and save them from extinction. So communitiescan
continue Correct your spelling
communities can
communities
practicing
and Change the spelling
practising
perserving
their customs, and more tourism can raise awareness and appreciation for these cultural practices. Correct your spelling
preserving
For instance
, Flamenco is a traditional dance from Spain, there are many special dates where
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when
people
dress with the customs, so individuals won’t forget about their histoy
and make more Correct your spelling
history
people
know about it. I believe this
point of view is preferable because all people
should try to preserve the history of their country and of the planet.
In conclusion, although
there can be omissions or only few
details about why some places follow certain Change the article
a few
culture
, it will allow Fix the agreement mistake
cultures
a
increasing number of individuals to know about the history, tradition and Change the article
an
culture
of that country, and this
is why it is more important to allow tourists to follow and learn about cultural traditions
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