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Some argue that music mainly serves as a way for individuals to reduce their stress and anxiety. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In
this
 day and age, some perspectives of individuals extend that
music
 is a main factor
to reduce
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in reducing
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 stress and anxiety. I completely agree
this
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with this
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 statement and my initiatives will be proven with relevant examples in
this
 essay. Obviously,
music
 is
considerably
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 major mitigating factor that most
people
 are addicted to
listen
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listening
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 to
music
 when they find themselves in a trouble situation or accept any hurt to torture them. In
words
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, classical
music
 decrease
the
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feelings
 of depression and anxiety since it tend to have
soothing
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a soothing
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 rhythm that
it
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apply
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can deal with
the
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apply
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issue relating to high blood pressure . Some scientific
researches
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research
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 show that some
music
 works composed by Beethoven ,
Mozart
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and Mozart
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 are advised to
consume
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 before taking exam or attending job interviews
due to
fact
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 that they are able to
stake to
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overwhelm agitation in
the
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terms of exciting situations.
On the other hand
,
music
 can be
major
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a major
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 “psychologist “ or “friend” for some
people
 when they have to be alone with their emotions and
feelings
 being suffered from some troubling positions. Unlike extroverted humans, Introverted
people
 prefer to be lonely with their inner
feelings
 and thoughts rather than participate in psychologist appointments when their mental health is incurring damaging situations. And at
this
 time , listening to
music
 about sadness can make them cry and throw out their sorrows in tears. Behind
this
 , they eliminate psychic crowdedness in their brain in spite of the fact that they do not try to make any appointments with psychologists .
To sum up
, any genre of
music
 not only can be a
significantly
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 principal cause to improve individuals’ lifestyles but
also
it
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apply
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supports them as
“reliable
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a “reliable
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 company” for
people
 who live in their own world and focus on their inner
feelings
 and thoughts.
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