Some people think that government should invest in wildlife projects and protect them. Other people think it is better if government invests money in other projects. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Protect
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wildlife
is always an important issue nowadays because
damages
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damage
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that people
has
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brought to
the
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apply
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wildlife
. In
this
article, we are going to concentrate on the aspect should
goverment
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government
invest in
wildlife
projects
or not
?
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.
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Some
opinion
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opinions
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indicated
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that
government
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the government
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should invest in
wildlife
projects
and protect them. Because of human activities,
the
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apply
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wildlife
has been distracted or even deleted,
therefore
, the habitat of many animals has been destroyed.
Accordingly
, there should be rules or
projects
that can invest and protect in
wildlife
. That will reduce the damages generated
from
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by
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human
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humans
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.
In addition
, the power of
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the goverment
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goverment
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government
is large enough to make their
project
going to force effectively
while
any other organization can not have
such
as attracting resources.
In contrast
, some
opinion
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opinions
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indicated that
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the goverment
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goverment
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government
should invest money in
other
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another project
other projects
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project
because investing in
wildlife
project
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projects
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and
protect
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protecting
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them is only resolved
the
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at the
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top of the reason. To resolve all
issue
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issues
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, the
goverment
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government
should delete the original reasons for the damages
such
as
replace
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replacing
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the
using
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of nilon
bag
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bags
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by
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with
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cotton
bag
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or paper
bag
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. That will lead to the
reduce
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of
nilon
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nylon
bag
to
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in
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the environment that's mean protecting
the
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apply
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wildlife
in
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for
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the final purpose.
Acorddingly
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Accordingly
, in my opinion, we should combine both types. The
goverment
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government
should invest in
wildlife
projects
and
others
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other
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projects
. Investing directly in
wildlife
project
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projects
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hepls
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helps
us resolve
problem
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problems
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rapidly
however
temporarily. Meanwhile, investing in other
projects
can not resolve
issue
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issues
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imediately
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immediately
however
it can delete the resources of problems. In conclusion, the
goverment
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government
should combine both
invest
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investing
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in
wildlife
or other
projects
to
gain
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achieve
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the best goals and make our
life
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lives
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better.
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