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Some people think that instead of preventing climate change, we need to find a way to live with it. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Living
along with
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climate
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change
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 is an option that people opt
.
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 I disagree with
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 opinion, since humans are not able to adapt to a new environment transitory, and triumph over it could be easier. First of all, nowadays
climate
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change
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 occurs by accumulation of an unprecedented phenomenon which
close-related
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with
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to
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the industry
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industry revolution
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Industrial Revolution
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. The revolution caused integral problems,
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example
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 global warming,
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 rain, and social disintegration.
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, the world witnesses global warming from the gas-trapped mechanism
by
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glass-houses
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glass-house
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 gasses
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 as carbon dioxide produced by transportation industries.
Acid
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 rain happens when the
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 materials from the chemical industries evaporate and condense in the sky,
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precipitate with high acidity and may cause corrosion in some metal stuff.
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, social disintegration may happen from industry deforestation which makes the local community apart from its indigenous circumstances and could lead to social conflicts.
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, tackling the impending problems caused by
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change
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 may be easier than adapting to it. Gas-trapped mechanisms can be reduced by using less fossil-sourced fuel
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 and replacing it with renewable ones
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 as electricity from wind.
Acid
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 rain could be prevented by rigid regulations to constrain
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factory development in certain areas. Social disintegration might be solved by more sustainable forest-used industry plans,
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 as making an industry-forest to
fulfill
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 the needs of certain materials.
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, adapting to a new environment, people may find difficulties. Biological attributes play an important role,
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 the modification of it
for adapting
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 well may take a long time to achieve. High temperatures could be lethal for humans when the adaptation process is in progress. So, it may not be possible to live with
climate
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change
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 currently.
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, wise choices to overcome
climate
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change
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's problems need to be taken meticulously, because it involves a great demand
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economical
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, political, social, and cultural aspects to prevail.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • climate change
  • prevent
  • adaptation
  • mitigation
  • cope with
  • effects
  • shift
  • mindset
  • lifestyle
  • balance
  • invest
  • research
  • technology
  • crucial
  • education
  • awareness
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