The pie graphs represent the proportion of Yemen and Italy population in three different ages over 50-year period between 2000 and 2050
The pie graphs represent the proportion of Yemen and
Italy
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Italy's
population
in three different ages
over 50-year
period between 2000 and 2050.
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a 50-year
the 50-year
Overall
, there are
a significant increase in the percentages of Change the verb form
is
ages
of Yemen
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the Yemen
population
, except for age
of 0-14 Add an article
the age
years
, while
the ages
of 15-59 years
will be projected to be the highest number of people. Meanwhile, the population
of ages
in Italy experienced a gradually
decrease, except Change the adverb
gradual
the
older Change preposition
for the
ages
, whereas
the ages
population
of 15-59 years
is higher than ages
of
60+ Change preposition
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years
.
According to
the chart, the
Yemen’s Correct article usage
apply
population
figure of age 0-14 years
was the highest portion in 2000 with just above a
half, Remove the article
apply
while
in the next five decade
, it will be predicted to experience a Fix the agreement mistake
decades
down ward
trend at 37%. Correct your spelling
downward
Furthermore
, the group age of 15-59 years
(46,3%) was less than ages
of 0-14 years
in 2000, but the projection in the future will account the
largest Change preposition
for the
population
at around 57%. Additionally
, the number of populations for 60+ years
maintain
almost the same figure (3.6% and 5,7% respectively), and there is Correct subject-verb agreement
maintains
the
slight discrepancy between them around 2%.
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On the other hand
, the majority of population
in Italy for all Add an article
the population
period
was attributed Fix the agreement mistake
periods
for
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to
ages
of 15-59 Correct article usage
the ages
years
despite experiencing a decrease
trend. Change the verb form
decreasing
Moreover
, the quantity of 60+ years
was smaller than the prediction, or it was a
double less. Eventually, there Correct article usage
apply
are
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is
the
similar portion for Correct article usage
a
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the ages
ages
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age
population
of 0-14 years
(14,3% and 11,5% respectively), and the gap between data and prediction is about 2%.Submitted by ieltsyusepridwango on
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