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In recent years, the rise of ebooks causes the decline in paper books. Some people argue this is a good step forward while others do not. What are the advantages and disadvantages?

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There is no denying the fact that using
eBooks
 got increased
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 to the past years,
while
 it is a commonly held belief that the results of
this
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 caused an impact
to
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 paper
books
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using
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 which got decreased, there is
also
 an argument that
people
 should stop using
eBooks
, and there is other who
epposes
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opposes
opposed
oppose
 it,
this
 essay will analyse the advantages and disadvantages of
this
 topic, and express my opinion. On the one hand, we must no
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 sight of the fact that
people
 have recently found various ways in order to improve their information, and one of these ways is reading
eBooks
instead
 of
the
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paper ones,
in other words
, we have to take into consideration that the main advantage of online Books that it is made reading more easier than before,
for example
,
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whether
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 you are at home or not, by just carrying your phone you are able to read any book you want.
On the other hand
,
it is clear that
 sometimes when you are able to read
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 you want is going to make you read less than before,
for instance
,
according to
 a social study
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published in the
wall street journalist
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Wall Street Journalist
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 in twenty – first of October twenty hundred an nine, which was entitled "
ebooks
 disadvantages", the study results concluded that as easy as it is get to read is going to make
people
 not read at all. In conclusion, despite
people
 having different views, I tend to believe that
ebooks
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 an essential part of our everyday life, and it is important to complete using
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