The diagram below shows the development of cutting tools in the Stone Age. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the development of cutting tools in the Stone Age. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram illustrates how the cutting tools advanced in the Stone Age between 1.4 million years ago and 0.8 million years ago.
Overall
,
it is clear that
tool
B
is sharper and more regularly shaped than the earlier one. Over a period of 0.6 million years, the cutting
tool
also
increased in size and effectiveness.
To begin
with, the front view depicts that the edges of
tool
A are rough, revealing its
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earlier stage of development.
Whereas
tool
A is comparatively primitive,
therefore
, the smooth edges of
tool
B
are clearly more effective as a cutting instrument.
Futhermore
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Furthermore
, one of the main differences between the tools is shown in the side view of
diagram
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.
While
tool
A is irregular, in
constract
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contract
contrast
tool
B
has a regular, flattened shape. The sharp edge of
tool
B
is designed for cutting
object
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cleanly and easily.
Finally
, the back view shows most clearly that
tool
A is not only rougher
,
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but is
also
smaller than
tool
B
.
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