The diagram below shows the development of cutting tools in the Stone Age. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram illustrates how the cutting tools advanced in the Stone Age between 1.4 million years ago and 0.8 million years ago.
Overall
, it is clear that
tool
B
is sharper and more regularly shaped than the earlier one. Over a period of 0.6 million years, the cutting tool
also
increased in size and effectiveness.
To begin
with, the front view depicts that the edges of tool
A are rough, revealing its more
earlier stage of development. Change the word
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Whereas
tool
A is comparatively primitive, therefore
, the smooth edges of tool
B
are clearly more effective as a cutting instrument.
Futhermore
, one of the main differences between the tools is shown in the side view of Correct your spelling
Furthermore
diagram
. Add an article
the diagram
While
tool
A is irregular, in constract
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contract
contrast
tool
B
has a regular, flattened shape. The sharp edge of tool
B
is designed for cutting object
cleanly and easily. Fix the agreement mistake
objects
Finally
, the back view shows most clearly that tool
A is not only rougher,
but is Remove the comma
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also
smaller than tool
B
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