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The graph and chart below give information on the average daily maximum and minimum temperatures in degrees Celsius and the average number of days with rainfall each month for two Australian cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant(Mixed charts).

The graph and chart below give information on the average daily maximum and minimum temperatures in degrees Celsius and the average number of days with rainfall each month for two Australian cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant(Mixed charts).
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The two provided charts depict the maximum and minimum temperatures per day in measure Celsius and how many
days
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 happen regularly rainfall in two Australian cities.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 there is an upward trend in the percentage of maximum and minimum temperatures per day in two Australian cities from Aug to
Dec
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while
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 there are downward trends of both measures in Jun and July.
In addition
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, the
Brisband
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Brisbane
 has the highest figure in Feb and Mar,
while
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 the opposite is true with the average number of rainy
days
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 in Canberra. In more
the
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details
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, starting at 13
days
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 in Jan, the figures for the average number of
days
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 with rainfall in Brisband accrue marginally by 1 day in Feb and Mar , followed by a final fluctuation from Apr to
Dec
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.
Besides
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, similar changes can be seen in the figures for the average number of rainy
days
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, which stabilize of 7
days
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 in Jan, Feb, Apr, May, Nov and
Dec
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 and experience a notable stability of 10
days
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 in 3 months from Jun to Aug. Looking at the line graph, the percentage of maximum and minimum degrees C in both cities all hit the lowest point in July.
On the contrary
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 , both measures all reach a peak in
Dec
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 in
Brisband
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Brisbane
 and Canberra.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words days, dec with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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