Some people think that young people should spend free time with families instead of outside entertainment, others disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

In

this

day and age, it is widely believed that young

people

should allocate their

time

to families in lieu of going outside for outdoor activities,

while

others disagree. From my personal perspective,

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believe that children should have a balance between family and outside entertainment to ensure their mental and physical health are well-being, and

this

essay shall elaborate on the rationale. On the one hand, there are plausible reasons why teenagers should allocate their quality

time

to their own flesh and blood. Spending quality

time

with family play an important role in children's behaviour and emotion when they growing up. Having meaningful

time

with family before leaving home for a long distance to find a job or earn a living,

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helps them feel homesick and regret excessively.

In addition

,

time

is unpredictable, so

people

will not know exactly when their parents or relatives die.

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cause to young

people

become depressed and experience psychological issues when facing these problems. To minimize these issues, young

people

should invest their

time

in their families as much as possible when they can.

However

, in

this

day and age, teenagers are experiencing significant stress from work and studies.

Consequently

, they have to go outside to blow off some steam to enhance their work and study performance. If young

people

are prohibited from going outside for entertainment that

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teenagers' mental health to be overwhelmed and could lead to

mental

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disorder

such

as depression, autism and anxiety.

Besides

that, outside entertainment helps children to build up their social connection with others, which plays a crucial role in the life of an individual

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they grow up. When teenager engage in outdoor activities, they will develop some essential

skills

such

as communication

skills

and problem-solving

skills

, which are helpful for those when finding a job and in their career path in the future.

To conclude

,

although

allocating leisure hours to bloodlines increases affinity, engaging in open-air pleasure enhances interpersonal

skills

and networks. I think that young

people

should allocate their

time

equally to ensure comprehensive development.