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The development of tourism contributed to english becoming the most prominent language in the world. Some think that this will lead to english becoming only spoken language globally. What are the advantages and disadvantages to having one language in the world.

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The text is an op-ed from 2010, published in the
British
 magazine ‘The Observer’.
Due to
this
, it is aimed at a
British
 audience, who are likely left-leaning, as the Observer is known for its centre-left stance. The purpose of the op-ed is to bring attention to and emphasize the negative impacts of the disregard towards learning foreign
languages
 that,
according to
 the author,
British
 people hold. Britain and other Anglophone countries have a reputation for being unwilling to learn new
languages
due to
 English being regarded as ‘the global language’.
Furthermore
, the calibre of foreign
languages
,
such
 as French, being taught in
British
 public schools is notorious for being poor, and students are often dismissive towards learning other
languages
 - a sentiment the piece aims to challenge. My thesis statement is that the author effectively depicts negative
British
 attitudes towards foreign
languages
 in an entertainingly written op-ed whilst extols them to be more open to learning new
languages
 through a mix of high-register lexicon, colloquialisms and humour, and through the extended metaphor of being ‘confined’.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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