The maps below show the development of the Paradise island for tourism purposed.

The maps below show the development of the Paradise island for tourism purposed.
The given pair of maps illustrates the layout of
the
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Paradise
island
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in the past
as well as
at present.
Overall
, the flora on the isle was uprooted and removed to make space for tourism buildings. Before its transformation, the sole man-made structure of the land was a scientific research station being accessed by a boat on a pier. Currently,
however
, a hotel with an adjacent swimming pool has replaced the former facility.
Additionally
, the pier is now expanded to better accommodate for docking of large cruise ships.
Furthermore
, to the
center
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of the area lies an open restaurant with BBQ space nearby.
Moreover
, there used to be a natural spring to the east which has remained unchanged except for the placement of a cafe close by.
In addition
to that, to the northeast there is a scenic lookout and to the northwest a beach for swimming.
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the entire place can be navigated by a path for
cycalists
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cyclists
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