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The maps below show the development of the Paradise island for tourism purposed.

The maps below show the development of the Paradise island for tourism purposed.
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The given pair of maps illustrates the layout of
the
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Paradise
island
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Island
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 in the past
as well as
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 at present.
Overall
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, the flora on the isle was uprooted and removed to make space for tourism buildings. Before its transformation, the sole man-made structure of the land was a scientific research station being accessed by a boat on a pier. Currently,
however
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, a hotel with an adjacent swimming pool has replaced the former facility.
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, the pier is now expanded to better accommodate for docking of large cruise ships.
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, to the
center
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 of the area lies an open restaurant with BBQ space nearby.
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, there used to be a natural spring to the east which has remained unchanged except for the placement of a cafe close by.
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 to that, to the northeast there is a scenic lookout and to the northwest a beach for swimming.
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Finally
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 the entire place can be navigated by a path for
cycalists
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cyclists
.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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