This essay question is from Cambridge IELTS 16 Test 4 Writing Task 1. The diagram below shows the process for recycling plastic bottles. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

This essay question is from Cambridge IELTS 16 Test 4 Writing Task 1. The diagram below shows the process for recycling plastic bottles. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagram visualizes how
plastic
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bottles
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are recycled and used to create different products.
This
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cycle process can be divided into three main stages: collecting and sorting, compressing and crushing, and converting raw
plastic
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pellets into different end products.
Initially
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, garbage trucks collect the
plastic
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waste
materials
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from dust bins.
Then
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these are transported to recycling
centers
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centres
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, where waste is sorted by humans. During the sorting, only
plastic
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bottles
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are collected for
further
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processing.
After
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this
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stage, the
bottles
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are compressed into large blocks, and
then
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they are crushed using machines. Crushed plastics, which are the output after crushing, are directly put into washing tanks.
Next,
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these washed plastics are put into machines in order to produce
plastic
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pellets.
After
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this
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,
plastic
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pellets are heated to create raw
materials
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. Meanwhile, these raw
materials
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are stocked until they are used for different product creations.
Finally
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, these raw
materials
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will be used for making products
such
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as
bottles
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, t-shirts, bags, pencils, or lunch boxes.
This
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process
then
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repeats itself continuously.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "after this".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words plastic, bottles, materials with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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