Some people view conflict between teenagers and parents as a necessary part of growing up, while others view it as something negative which should be avoided. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Other folks perceive disagreement between teenagers and parents as a required part of growing up,
while
some see it as something not good and should be skipped.Below I will tackle both sides elaborating how healthy it is for conflict view within families to a certain extent.
Firstly
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of different sides is healthy in any form of relationship ,in
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children and parents should normalise situations like
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.I once read a book by one of
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pestigious
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authors about relationships.It gave an example that adults are responsible
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their young ones.As so they should have healthy disagreements .
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will help both parties to respect each other's views and
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.He goes on to say
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,
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that this
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this
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different views should not
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to
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the
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other
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or offending .In my own opinion,my interpretation was that during
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small talks ,
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is interaction ,quality time and education involved regarding a certain subject.
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by respecting both views ,we learn that being older does not
gurantee
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guarantee
knowing everything or always right and the opposite.
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,to a lesser
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this
type of
discussions
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should be avoided as
their
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will end up becoming a habit resulting in verbal
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sometimes leading to physical
fight
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.My Uncle and his family moved abroad when
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was young .Everyone in my family used to admire how educated he was and how he was so close to his kids.They would talk about everything under the sun.One day Uncle had an emergency and he was admitted
at
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the Intensive Care Unit.He had been pushed down
fcrom
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from
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floor in his house by his son Tayana.They had been discussing
about
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how Tawana should stop
iviting
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inviting
different girls to the house.What had started as discussed,turned into an argument
then
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and then
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got physical.In my
view
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view,
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Uncle failed to set boundaries with his son and the end was
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a tragedy
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.In the
end
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they
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has to be
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not
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be crossed that way relationships are
mantained
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maintained
. To sum it up
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,It is
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for families to have
different
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a different
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perspective
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on certain topics.
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interaction
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to bring the family closer and built communication skills .At the same time,freedom of expression should be limited so that respect is
mantained
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maintained
as shown above.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • maturing
  • facilitates
  • independence
  • fosters
  • problem-solving skills
  • personal values
  • beliefs
  • potentially harmful
  • persistent misunderstandings
  • parent-child relationship
  • source of stress
  • anxiety
  • constructive conflict
  • managed
  • communication skills
  • fosters growth
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