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The table below shows information about age, average income per person and population below poverty

The table below shows information about age, average income per person and population below poverty
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The table gives information about age, average age,
income
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 per person and population of those who live below the poverty line in three states of the USA.
Overall
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, it is important to note that
although
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 the highest
proportion
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 of young
people
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, who are under 18, live in Utal,
this
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 state accounts for the lowest average
income
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 per person .
Moreover
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, it is readily apparent that both
California
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 and
Florida
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 stand at the highest average
income
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while
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 they have considerably fewer young individuals in comparison to Utal.
According to
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 Utal,
whereas
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 the annual
income
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 is merely 17,000 dollars for each citizen, 28% of the population is under 18.
However
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, the percentage of old
people
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, who are over 60 reduces sharply to just 8% in
this
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 area.
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, only 9% of
people
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 live below the poverty line. In terms of
California
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 , it reaches an average of 23,000 dollars per person each year.
Likewise
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,
Florida
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 earns roughly the same sum of money, 22,000.
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, both include approximately the same
proportion
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 of under under-18-year population, 17% and 16% respectively.
While
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California
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 compares just 13% of old
people
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,
this
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 percentage grows progressively to 23% in
Florida
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.
California
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also
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 stands at 16%
proportion
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 of the poor.
On the other hand
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,
this
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proportion
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 declined slightly to 12% in
Florida
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 90%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words income, proportion, people, california, florida with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stand" was used 2 times.
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