The table below shows information about age, average income per person and population below poverty

The table below shows information about age, average income per person and population below poverty
The table gives information about age, average age,
income
per person and population of those who live below the poverty line in three states of the USA.
Overall
, it is important to note that
although
the highest
proportion
of young
people
, who are under 18, live in Utal,
this
state accounts for the lowest average
income
per person .
Moreover
, it is readily apparent that both
California
and
Florida
stand at the highest average
income
while
they have considerably fewer young individuals in comparison to Utal.
According to
Utal,
whereas
the annual
income
is merely 17,000 dollars for each citizen, 28% of the population is under 18.
However
, the percentage of old
people
, who are over 60 reduces sharply to just 8% in
this
area.
Also
, only 9% of
people
live below the poverty line. In terms of
California
, it reaches an average of 23,000 dollars per person each year.
Likewise
,
Florida
earns roughly the same sum of money, 22,000.
Furthermore
, both include approximately the same
proportion
of under under-18-year population, 17% and 16% respectively.
While
California
compares just 13% of old
people
,
this
percentage grows progressively to 23% in
Florida
.
California
also
stands at 16%
proportion
of the poor.
On the other hand
,
this
proportion
declined slightly to 12% in
Florida
.
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