Some companies sponsor sportsports as a way to advertise themselves. Some people think it is good for the world of sports, while others think there are disadvantages. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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beginning
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people
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cooperate
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same
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opinion, like above
mension
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abovementioned
that about some of many companies'
sports
leaders make
advertisment
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advertisements
for their selves. There
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two
diffrent
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different
opinion
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, some
people
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believe
that there is an
advantages
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for
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sports
but
in
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on
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other hand
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there are others
think
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it
is disadvantages
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for
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this
word of sport.
Firstly
, we want to
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discuss
about
people
who think of a good for
sports
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the sports
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world. They think it will
incourage
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encourage
people
to do
sports
,
increase
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and increase
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investment
during buy
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items
of
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apply
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sports
like balls, towels, bags and
sport
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sports
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suits.
In
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the other hand, some
people
think there are bad ideas for
advertisments
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advertisements
from
companies
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company
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sponsers
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sponsors
. If we ask
our selves
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ourselves
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why do they think like that? Maybe, they
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are afraid
about
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there
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children that follow
players
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the players
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, some of them
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addict
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druges
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drugs
or have
bad
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reputaion
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reputation
but not all of them. Or they have
no
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not
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enough money to buy and extra things like
orginal
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original
balls are very expensive. Some companies support
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