The chart gives information on the percentage of women going into higher education in five countries for the years 1980 and 2015.

The chart gives information on the percentage of women going into higher education in five countries for the years 1980 and 2015.
The bar chart shows the range of girls who joined the university in 1980 and 2015. Which involve the UK, USA, Australia, South Korea and France.
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enrolled on higher education were in Australia and France in 1980 and 2015.
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, the lowest join was in South Korea.
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the chart, Australia in 1980 and 2015 had the same number of enrolled students by 58%. In the USA there are differences in rate where it rose sharply from 38% to 55%.
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there was a similar happened it increased dramatically from 33% to 53%. France has a small difference, the number went up slightly by 5%. As well in South Korea the rate was low but there is a big difference between these
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years, the amount shot up from 15% to 30% in 2015.
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