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What are advantage and disadvantages of immigration?

#advantage #immigration
Nowadays it is a
following
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trend
of moving
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to move
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 from one place to another. Many
people
 strive to change their location to another one. The essay will show
pros
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the pros
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 and cons of
immigration
.
To begin
 with,
immigration
 is a tendency prevailing in countries with a low level of life.
Firstly
, habitats begin to move to another part of the world in
hope
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 of earning more money, getting better medicine,
for instance
, so it would be reasonable for them to change the place where they live to another. They can get more opportunities if they habitat in a new spot.
Secondly
, many
people
 do not have a chance to stay in their deposit
due to
 a war. As an example, the military operation in Ukraine does not allow residents to continue living in their
home
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 so they have to immigrate to stay alive.
On the other hand
,
immigration
 has a lot of disadvantages. First of all, it leads to a high rate of crime. Many statistics show that places full of immigrants suffer from violence and robbery. It is happening because
people
 of different nations, cultures, and traditions are
facing
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,
therefore
, it leads to conflicts. What is more, local
people
 cannot find suitable places for their children
for
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 study because schools, universities and other
education
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 institutions are replete with foreigners. A similar example is a high rate of employment. Many companies are full of
people
.
Thus
, lack of social institutions is a usual problem in countries with many immigrants.
To conclude
 all the above,
immigration
 can be as positive as negative. In my opinion, the flows are prevailing.
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